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My only critique of this article would be that I'm not completely sure I understand what Vida: Women in Literary Arts is exactly. Is it a club? Or a non-profit? Or just an organization? I see that they are involved in the literary world, but how are they structured? Are there members? I'm not sure if these questions are 100% relevant, but I feel like I was just confused about Vida itself. The article itself is well laid-out and very readable.Atvedt (talk) 20:49, 30 May 2013 (UTC)

I agree with the above statement where did the term/name Vida come from does it stand for something? Is it V.I.D.A.? Or is it a name?

Perhaps in the count section or reaction section there can be a feminist view of the count and a non feminist view, maybe a quote about it being or not being acknowledged in the literary community.

The reaction part is great and basically answers the question above however; maybe a candid quote from a magazine bashing the count would go a long way?

Maybe put a link to the poem itself next to Anne sexton’s name.

I understand the problem with gender bias actions in the literary world but have there been any outright degradations of women? Any publications that refuse to publish women, women who have changed their names to a male’s name just to have their works read or published?

Have there been any huge or small fights or deaths or rapes or violence in this world due to women writers or women trying to write?? Akitchens75 (talk) 21:10, 30 May 2013 (UTC)

Mission: I feel that as an outsider I do not understand what this article is representing or what this section is supposed to be about. However, I do know that you weren't finished with this section. My suggestion is that you elaborate on this section, but I am guessing you already intend to do so.

History: I do not understand, is this an organization? a movement? Can you explain? Also, in the last few sentences you use the word huge, I would like to see it replaced with a word like extensive, immense, massive, or vast. I feel that one of these words would flow better in the information you are articulating.

The Count: I have no suggestions for this section. It looks well written.

Reactions: I have no suggestions for this section. It looks well written. Seems slightly biased, but I have no idea how to fix that.

Her Kind: Could You elaborate more on this magazine?

Wstotts (talk) 07:08, 2 June 2013 (UTC)Wstotts

Similar Organizations: I have no suggestions. Maybe some more examples of organizations?

This article is in excellent shape. It's well organized, and makes clear why VIDA is notable, and does a good job maintaining NPOV on a topic that really isn't neutral. I have a just a few editorial notes:

Judging from usage on VIDA's own website, the name should be in all CAPS every time.

There's an extra bit of code just before footnote #8

There are couple of places where you have used the phrase "males and females" or "males versus females"; many consider this is largely a stylistic preference, but "men and women" is generally preferred, as female and male are adjectives when referring to human beings:

“Female” or “Woman”? -- http://www.dailywritingtips.com/female-or-woman/

Woman Versus Female -- http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/woman-versus-female.aspx

Just before footnote 10 -- should this read "as numbers of The Count in subsequent years show this to be the case"?

E. Kissling (talk) 22:24, 2 June 2013 (UTC)