User talk:Raynesylvester/sandbox

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Hey guys, I just wanted to create this page so we can maybe chat more easily about what's getting done and update each other. I'll email everyone about this talk page soon.

So far, everything we have written seems spot on for the article and is looking great. I did want to make a note about section headings. I think the section title "security threats" alone encompasses violence, and that we should come up with a title for the campus police section that is succinct and includes non-police officials who monitor schools as well. Let me know your thoughts.

I will be working mainly on the Introduction tomorrow, and will add a few small things to the surveillance section as well to round it out as far as basic content and Sunday will be spent making sure the details are checking out.

Please tell me if something is excluded from the introduction that you find important to the definition of school security after I post that or if it isn't a well rounded summary. I am going to try my best to touch on the major idea as well as what it entails without writing anything that should be under one of our sections. Raynesylvester (talk) 08:08, 3 February 2018 (UTC)

=Rayne, thanks for making a talk page! Yes I also think it is a good idea to try to more or less finalize the page today (Saturday). Ideas for the police section title: maybe 'School authorities' or 'security enforcement'? Jane, please let us know your thoughts as well, since it's your section. Thanks everyone! Stardust97 (talk) 17:50, 3 February 2018 (UTC)

==I just rearranged the order of topics on the page: After the introduction, then three topics on "problems" (safety threats, vandalism, bullying), then three topics on "solutions" (police presence, surveillance, id cards). What does everyone think of this order? Stardust97 (talk) 19:32, 3 February 2018 (UTC)

===p.s. another thought would be to have the "solution" topics first and then the "problem" topics second... Stardust97 (talk) 19:35, 3 February 2018 (UTC)

I think "Security enforcement" is a good section title. I also think problems then solutions does seem like the natural progression of the article. Raynesylvester (talk) 20:18, 3 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi guys, I think the page is looking really good! I just read it over for typos and corrected a few things. Let me know if there's anything else I need to contribute to. See you all tomorrow. Stardust97 (talk) 18:03, 4 February 2018 (UTC)