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Article Evaluation
Rb1157a (talk) 19:26, 31 January 2018 (UTC)

The Pizzagate article I looked at could be problematic with it's use of mainly news articles for facts. See my full response on their talk page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rb1157a (talk • contribs) 19:40, 31 January 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review of Disney California Adventure
Overall, I thought your additions to the Disney California Adventure (DCA) article gave a good overview of the potential character experiences and live performances offered in DCA. I imagine your additions being particularly useful to a first-time visitor to the park.

As an avid Disney fan myself, I could easily understand the park attractions and events you were describing. However, as you are writing for a more general audience, I would suggest more thorough descriptions of the character experiences and live performances. Wherever possible, I suggest linking to other wiki articles when you reference specific spots in DCA. For example, you mention the Hyperion Theater. I would suggest linking to the wiki on Hyperion Theater (as I have done in the previous sentence). In this way, you do not have to give highly technical, detailed descriptions of each event you describe. You give your readers the opportunity to explore more information than what could feasibly be given in your additions to the DCA wiki. Some other terms in your article to consider linking are FastPass, Frozen the Musical, and D23 Expo.

You mention some interesting tid-bits that are unique to DCA and worth expanding upon. For example, you mention "As of right now, Paradise Pier no longer exists." I believe this point is pertinent and worth expanding slightly. It would give the reader insight into the evolution of the park!

On a more technical note, I found some minor typos in the wiki article. 'Arandelle' should be 'Arendelle.' In the section "Adding to Live Entertainment Heading" you mention 'Disney California' and drop 'Adventure.'

The first draft of your additions to the DCA article look promising. I look forward to seeing how you expand your piece!

Bienfaisance (talk) 23:11, 6 March 2018 (UTC)