User talk:Rbareiss/sandbox

The Early Life and Teaching Career sections you wrote are really good. I found them a lot more interesting to read than the original article. My only real suggestions are technical. The first Paragraph of early life is missing several citations. You also need to fix the way you are putting in citations because I noticed that instead of using the naming format so that citations of the same source share the same number, each citation you make creates a new number and a huge list in your references section. You can fix this by naming each reference and using that name each time you cite the reference. You probably already know this but what you have done so far is good so I didn't know what else to suggest. Other than that, there are just a lot of words that you can create links to in your article with the double brackets. Good work and I look forward to seeing what you do with the methodology and retirement sections. --Caitmcn (talk) 22:42, 27 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for your suggestions! I was having some troubles with the citations but I think I figured it out now. I think my biggest concerns now are on whether my explanations of his work are clear, especially in the deviance section. --Rbareiss (talk) 08:25, 28 November 2011 (UTC)