User talk:Realcjcruz/sandbox

The page of Jacobello del Fiore has already contained quite a lot of information but I found the layout of the article particularly confusing. For example, the section "Early Life and Works" combines both his life and artistic development. Moreover, at the same time, there is a separate section called "Later Works and Final Years" which does not structurally flow. I would rather make a section discussing his artworks in a chronological order and leave a shorter paragraph for his personal life. Moreover, I would rather have the paragraph about his legacy, probably with others' comments on him, listed as a separate section.

There are also grammar mistakes in this articles, such as "Jacobello is likely to have been born in 1375". Certain sentences are also long and daunting (e.g:The year 1401 marks a transition in Jacobello's career from a more archaic, gothic style, utilized in the last decade of the Trecento and captured in the Matthiesen Crucifixion, to a more modern style concerned with line, as seen in the Giovaneli Madonna and Crucifixion with Mourners and Saints in a French private collection.) The sentences could be rewritten to express the ideas more clearly.

In terms of citation and links, I would suggest to have more internal links connecting this artists to other artists. The article seems to be quite well cited so far. Have you found any particular dissertations, articles, books to be referred and cited?