User talk:Realrocksandcliffs/sandbox

1. What does the article (or section) do well? This article does a great job summarizing the history of the company, as well as describing their offerings and products. It's an interesting and unique topic which is very deserving of an article page. Your use of neutral language makes it easy and efficient to describe the scope of the company. 2. What changes would you suggest overall? I'm not sure if all of the products are necessary, as you could link to the website for the company, and instead provide some examples of their offerings. I also would say it could be interesting to note other aspects of the business, such as marketing strategies or their popularity as a brand, maybe even some competitors. 3. What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I like the path that this article is on, and really like the history and background section, but if you included more information about the business as a whole then it would feel complete. I like the tone and style of writing for this information as well, and it helps to provide a scope of the company to people who haven't heard of it. 4. Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I definitely realize that I can reference the topic directly less (ex. writing "it" or "these technologies" rather than fully writing out "remote patient monitoring"). I also like the way you easily summarize information, as sometimes my writing can be too lengthy and overly descriptive.