User talk:RebLAHIS/Feminist Performance Art

Lianawongg (talk) 00:34, 9 March 2022 (UTC)Hello, this is Liana:) Thank you for this article, Yoko Ono’s “Cut Piece” is for sure a very significant piece when it comes to gender violence, and I think it has showcased that male gaze through the actions and performances of the audiences. People should acknowledge this piece by recognizing the sexualization and materialization of the female body through the male perspective that has been performed in this work. I hope this article would allow space for people to reflect and realize the issues! The sources that you used in this article are reliable sources that have provided a lot of useful information and details on the artwork. I especially think the different narratives and portrayal of the piece from different people are extremely important, as well as how this piece is seen throughout time. You have gathered them together and written this in-depth description and introduction to the piece. I would love to see how this article would expand, as I think adding a brief background on the artist herself, as well as adding one or two sentences to simply mention the definition of the male gaze might be helpful for readers who are not familiar with the topic or the artist. I am looking forward to seeing how this article would unfold!

Peer Review - Angel
Hello! It's Angel! I have some feedback for your great article edits!

The opening of the section:

"Female's body, who performs or appears on stage, has becomes an evidence to speaks for herself/ itself."

Is a little bit unclear in regards to the subject or what this line is getting across... Perhaps a more basic, to-the-point definition of body-focused feminist performance art would benefit this section.

I think the section with examples of body-focused feminist performance art might be improved with a second or third example so that it feels more complete as there is currently only a single example of the practice.

Though it may not be intended, some of the writing in this section feels a bit like reflecting/examining the meaning of the work rather than explaining the basic denotative description of it alongside the stated intended purpose of the artist.

I think the performance art in Japan section could benefit from more than one example in the same way as the body-focused section. It would make the section feel more complete.

The final added section about male-gaze has a lot of great sources and it does a great job of being fairly neutral throughout. With some grammatical fixes, this section is working very well.

Excellent work! Thank you so much for sharing! — Preceding unsigned comment added by BrittanyAngelMa (talk • contribs) 05:32, 19 March 2022 (UTC)