User talk:Reblsa65/sandbox

Hey Rebecca! This looks like it's nearly ready! The content seems to be well researched and the details included make sense. The only thing I'd review is the flow of the article as a whole, specifically in terms of how the sections are divided. I know it's still not done and you're probably getting there, but you could consider merging the currently isolated "Performer" section and the second half of the "Early Life" section (Callen's first interactions with the HIV positive community).

Other than that, just pay attention to small technicalities like linking to other pages–– make sure the whole name is highlighted and that you're consistent in when you're linking (eg. it seems to be standard to link the first time a name appears to their own Wiki page and then not do it again?).

Overall, great article! Song.of.purple.summer (talk) 03:39, 26 October 2018 (UTC)

You are moving along well, Keep it up--RJBazell (talk) 16:44, 25 October 2018 (UTC)

Hello,

Your article is looking great so far. I believe that you have been able to find the important information from your sources and just use those. Your article is easy to read and flows naturally. I like how everything is organized for the most part. I could see you adding a few more details here and there, especially in the last part, but I know this part is not finished yet so I'm sure you will get to it. The end of the article could end up with death and public reaction to his death.Limur34 (talk) 13:54, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Astra peer review
Hivseminar (talk) 02:13, 30 October 2018 (UTC)Hi Rebecca, Good job so far! You really expanded upon the original article, especially in terms of the sections dedicated to his notable written works and their impact on AIDS activism. In terms of the unedited section at the bottom, I think it could be interesting if you researched who he performed with and if they later had any influence on his activism work, but besides that your article looks good!