User talk:Regan nick/sandbox

5/6/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 03:15, 7 May 2019 (UTC)


 * Points: 31.0/40
 * Grade: 77.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...reinforced by Tournai limestone." 'By' should be 'with'.
 * "...that accrued outside..." 'accrued' is probably not the best word for this situation.

Language
Meets standard.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Does not meet standard. It's very hard to trace what you have written to the source you have used. I am not finding anything written about Tournai limestone in the source text. If you can point me to the passage, I will be happy to change this point in the grade.

Completion
Does not meet standard. This is not quite the volume of added material that I am looking for.

Relevance
Meets standard.

6/3/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 17:06, 3 June 2019 (UTC)
 * Points: 32/40
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...Rouen became occupied..." replace with 'was'
 * "...5th Panzer Division, who destroyed..." replace with 'which'
 * "...Canadian Infantry liberated..." 'Infantry' should not be capitalized.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "The locals referred to the this week of bombings...as 'Red Week'" Which week? Your text does not say which week this was. Your source says it was "the end of May 1944."

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.
 * the 5th Panzer Division has an article, and should therefore be linked.

Validity
Does not meet standard.
 * Your Whitlock source says that "As French Army units pulled out of Rouen and retreated westward, they dynamited the bridges over the Seine; the German 5th Panzer Division moved in and claimed the city on June 9." Your draft says that the Germans "destroyed all the bridges crossing the Seine." Which is it?
 * You say "According to some estimates...", but are you sure there was more than one estimate? Your source says nothing about where the figure comes from.
 * You write "...suffered around 15,000 causalities..." when your source says "killing perhaps as many as 1,500 people." A slip of the '0' means a lot more dead.
 * You write "and left some 40,000 residents homeless." That's probably what your source means, but Whitlock does not specify that they were residents. Depending on where the number comes from, it may include non-residents. In wartime cities tend to absorb displaced people, who are not considered residents.
 * You write "The main cathedral of the city was spared," which is not what your source is saying. It is saying that it was not totally destroyed.

Completion
Nearly meets standard. There should be more material. These are pretty thin paragraphs.

Relevance
Meets standard.

6/12/2019 Evaluation by Ponads17
There isn’t a lot to go off of, and what’s there seems incomplete or lacking.
 * Points: 25/40

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.

“While Gothenburg's port also served as the main exit for goods such as oats were sold to Britain.” This does not feel grammatically complete/correct. “While Gothenburg’s port also served as the main exit for goods” and “goods, such as oats, were sold to Britain” but the two phrases together like this does not work. Maybe “Gothenburg’s port also served as the main exit for goods, such as oats, that were sold to Britain.” The “While” does not really fit.

Language
Nearly meets standard.

“... and the largest alone in Scandinavia” feels like awkward phrasing.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Nearly meet standard. “Gothenburg has one of the largest ports in the world, and the largest alone in Scandinavia, with almost 30% of Sweden's foreign trade utilizing this port.” Maybe dates, or something, to at least place when this was true. Looks like as of 2015, this might have been true, unless the publication was going on previous studies or surveys

Completion
Does not meet standard.

This seems to be far less than what the third-edit was calling for, unless you still have material to add before the final due date.

Relevance
Meets standard.

6/18/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 11:26, 18 June 2019 (UTC)

This is half-hearted at best.
 * Points: 27/40
 * Grade: 67.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...in the 1820's..." 1820s. It's plural, not possessive.
 * "While Gothenburg's port also served as the main exit for goods such as oats were sold to Britain." This sentence is not good.
 * "Gothenburg is also now aiming to become the leaders in the field" Gothenburg is singular, leaders is plural.
 * "...sustainable city. By which they..." There should be a comma, rather than two separate sentences.

Language
Does not meet standard.
 * "...a great deal of embrace during..." What does this mean?
 * "Exports of iron and boards..." By 'boards', do you mean processed lumber?
 * "Exports of iron and boards were often done through private investing" What does 'done' mean?
 * "...a science that is really taking hold within the city." Not appropriate language for encyclopedia.
 * "...affordable spaces for diverse networks." What does "diverse networks" mean in this context?

Organization
Nearly meets standard.
 * Not much internal structure - just loosely-related facts put together.

Coding
Nearly meets standard.
 * You do not have wikilinks to any other articles in Wikipedia.

Validity
Nearly meets standard.
 * Gothenburg does not have one of the largest ports in the world, nor does your source say that it does. The largest in Scandinavia does not mean all that much.

Completion
Does not meet standard.
 * You have insufficient material.

Relevance
Nearly meets standard.
 * A number of elements within this draft belong elsewhere in the article than the economy section, for example:
 * "In efforts to reduce carbon emissions, Gothenburg introduced a congestion tax in 2013"
 * Stuff about the port belongs under Transportation.