User talk:Reganmv10/sandbox

Tamara's Peer Review

This is a great article to contribute to and you have added many interesting contributions to the article! Your article draft is very well written in an informative and neutral tone. However, I picked up on some spelling errors such as in the first sentence of your "Modeling of human language" section, so you may want to read through the article and fix those before you submit it. Also, you have added many sources to the article that seem reliable which gives the article greater notability, but there are some sentences that do not have citations to support them that seem like they should. You could add citations to back up these segments: "The experiment called Project Nim was on of the first experiments that aimed to show nonhuman primates could be taught a human form of language. The experiment conducted on the chimpanzee dubbed "Nim Chimpsky" took place in the 1970's and was the idea of Herbet S. Terrace, to try to disprove the notion put forth by Naom Chomsky, for whom the chimp was named, stating that language is an exclusively human ability" and "A study done on East African Vervet monkeys showed that in the wild this species was able to produce at least 5 acoustically different alarm calls in response, and that other monkeys responded differently according to which alarm had been sounded."

Overall, great work and good luck! (Tcs366 (talk) 21:09, 7 November 2018 (UTC))

Peer Review - Rb1359
This is very well written! The draft is clear and concise, and easy to understand. The tone is neutral and the sources are reliable and well used. The subsection on the modeling of human language was a good addition and elaborates on the existing article in a way that adds understanding and relevance to the topic. Adding a paragraph on communication in the wild was a good idea, as it adds balance to the language section. The examples given in this section are relevant and explained in a clear way. However, citations aren’t given for some sentences. Overall, the sentence structure is good, however a few sentences could use revising. The sentence “There have been many examples of modeling of human language through entrainment in primates.” could be reworded. In the sentence “A different species of monkeys, the wild Campbell's monkeys” the first usage of the word monkey is redundant. I also noticed that in the lead section of the main article, the second sentence is very long and difficult to read. This is something you could consider editing. Rb1359 (talk) 03:30, 8 November 2018 (UTC)