User talk:Reliablesourceconnoisseur/sandbox

There are many different theories explaining the Causes of sexual violence. The theories that will be discussed in this article include military conquest, socioeconomics, anger, power, sadism, sexual pleasure, psychopathy, ethical standards, laws, attitudes toward the victims, and evolutionary pressures.Reliablesourceconnoisseur (talk) 06:09, 28 October 2019 (UTC)

There is a lot of good research in your sandbox and I think you filled in a lot of what your page was missing. The first paragraph though has quite a bit of info that would most likely be considered bias. I agree with it but many men would probably not like the information. If you are going to include specifics on sexual violence perpetuated by men, add something in about sexual violence perpetuated by women, even though there probably isn't much there. Also you have some information towards the bottom that does not have a source next to it, you shouldn't be making any claims at all on your own without a sources. For example, under Personality Disorder and Traits there is no source in that section at all. To make your points more clear you could try to add some actual statistics and maybe a few graphics like a chart for the different types of aggression. Overall I think your research is pretty well-rounded. ~Hannah Lux peer review

Your research seems very thorough and it seems as though you have been dwelling deeply into the topic of sexual violence. There are some gaps in your sourcing. Make sure any claims that you make are backed up with a good source rather than stating them as opinions. I would probably add more statistical data to back up your qualitative claims. An interesting thing to add would be how opinions of feminists have changed regarding sexual violence as I know that in the past pornography was blamed for it but no rigorous correlation has so far been found. I know that the media perpetuates rape culture as okay so maybe you could dwell deeper in the social implications behind the rates of sexual violence. Your article is doing great and I hope you continue to add the quality content! --Anastasia Shylnov — Preceding unsigned comment added by Anastasia.Shylnov (talk • contribs) 16:40, 9 November 2019 (UTC)