User talk:Renakat123/sandbox

Emily Furlong's Peer Review

''1. What does the article (or section) do well? '' The article is very well formatted with sections that both pertain and are relevant to the subject matter. The case presentations add applicability of the information presented and facilitates the reader's comprehension of the topic.

''2. What changes would you suggest overall? What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?'' The first section of the article is not complete. The last sentence is cut-off in the middle. I'm sure this was an oversight, but it definitely should be corrected prior to transferring onto the official Wikipedia site. Another change that I would suggest would be to create a separate section for "diagnosis." This area of knowledge is often in its own section in other disease pages on Wikipedia and other websites containing disease-defining and disease-related information. However, despite these two corrections, I think that the overall writing, structure, and format is very well done.

''3. Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!'' The main takeaway I have is the format of the article. I like how each section is underlined and each sub-section is bolded. This makes it very easy to read as the information is well structured. I will definitely take this into consideration when revising my own piece.

Quincy Ray's Peer Review
What does the article (or section) do well? There are a good amount of sources for the information that you have and it is well-written. I also like how you included case studies.

What changes would you suggest overall? The heading "Presentation" is a little confusing/vague. You could rename it or split it into Symptoms, Causes, and Diagnosis (like the avascular necrosis article).

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve her contribution? Explain more, cite sources, and add links to the Treatment section.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let her know! I might include case studies in my article if I can find any!