User talk:Revod123/sandbox

What does the article (or section) do well? It was very informative and uses factual, unbiased word choice.

What changes would you suggest overall? Define tunneling. Bold/unbold the subheadings to make them consistent Change tense: I would take out any "you" written and change it to third person ("the individual"). I would maybe clarify what treatments go with mild or severe cases. Is the lifestyle section for mild cases only, and then the treatment section just for severe cases?

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Add citations! it will make your life easier the sooner you start them.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I liked how you broke up your sections- it was very easy to read! Jmch5160 (talk) 15:48, 28 February 2020 (UTC)Jmch5160 (Julia)

Brandon Shin What does the article (or section) do well? The article does a good job explaining the topic. The divisions of treatment and the explanation behind each type of treatment was clear and concise. The article made the topic very simple so it was easier to understand.

What changes would you suggest overall? Maybe changing one of the headings from What is hidradenitis supparativa to just hidradenitis supparativa. If the article doesn't exist already, maybe making the topic hidradenitis supparativa and having treatments as the subheading might make more sense. If the article does exist, adding to it would also be helpful. Some sentences can be cleared up just by changing one or two words to make it seem more formal. Adding pictures would help the reader visualize better.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? I think just changing some of the titles or switching the topic to hidradenitis supparativa and having treatments as a subheading would be easier for you because there would be more to talk about as well.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I think the simple formatting is something I can use in my article. Makes it very easy to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bshin49 (talk • contribs) 15:56, 28 February 2020 (UTC)