User talk:Rhiannon38/sandbox

==10/14/2018 Evaluation byGracelorelei (talk) 19:20, 14 October 2018 (UTC) Points: 40/40 Grade: 100 Spelling/Grammar Meets Expectations

Language Exceeds Expectations

Organization Meets expectations, very well organized and clear

Coding meets expectations

Validity Meets expecattions, you have good sources and have cited everything

Completion Meets expecations, you have a decently long oaragraph filled with relevant information Relevance Meets expectations: Everything you have added seems to add something to the paragraph I didnt feel like there was anything that shouldnt have been in the paragraph

Sources Meets expectations: You have good sources and it seems you cited everything correctly.

Citations Meets Expectations, you have the required amount of citations and used them all References meets expectations.

10/15/2018 Evaluation by Harlie Hendrickson

 * Points: /40
 * Grade:

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Expectations The word "art" shouldn't be capitalized after High Renaissance or Medieval. I would also take out the phrase "around them" in the second sentence to make it more formal and succinct. Same thing with the fourth sentence- I would take out "their" from "their art."

Language
Meets Expectations A small suggestion: connect the last two sentences (because they are very related to each other) and revise the last sentence- "The Renaissance marked the rebirth of classical values in art and society;[2] Art turned toward the realistic as opposed to the idealistic."

Organization
Exceeds Expectations.

Coding
Exceeds Expectations

Validity
Exceeds Expectations Sources are from published books and from the PSU video database.

Completion
Exceeds Expectations Plenty of information and three quality sources.

Relevance
Exceeds Expectations

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Expectations As noted above, there are some capitalization issues which can be addressed. Other than that it looks great.

Language
Meets Expectations

Organization
Meets Expectations The ideas flow in a logical manner.

Coding
Meets Expectations

Validity
Meets Expectations

Completion
Meets Expectations

Relevance
Meets Expectations

WOMEN IN ROME EVALUATION Gracelorelei (talk) 21:27, 7 November 2018 (UTC)
Spelling/ grammar: Meets standard; Good spelling and grammer. Language: Meets standard, some of the first couple sentences could use some background information possibly, the paragraph was started with not a lot of context

Organization: Nearly meets standards, I think itd be beneficial to make it clear where you will be adding these paragraphs to the page to add context.

Coding: Meets standards.

Validity: Meets Standards your sources seem to be very well picked and provided valid info

Completion: Meets Standards

Relevance: Meets standards, I think its great you added a portion to the page about the womens influence

Sources: Nearly meets standards: while you have great sources, I believe for this weeks edit we needed to have at least 10 sources.

Citations: Meets standards, you cited everything very well

References: Meets standards

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Expectations The spelling seems correct. I would do one more quick once over of the grammar to see if anything could be better worded

Language
Meets Expectations The language is all proper and in keeping with the style of the article.

Organization
Meets Expectations The paragraphs are well laid out. You might consider giving them topic headings.

Coding
Exceeds Expectations There are lots of good links. Try and make the first mention of something the link however. An example would be ancient Rome, which you have linked on the 2nd mention of it, not the first.

Validity
Meets Expectations The information is valid to the topic of history in the city.

Completion
Exceeds Expectations You have written much more than is necessary for the assignment, which is good and shows dedication.

Relevance
Meets Expectations

Feedback from Prof McClanan
Rhiannon, The several sentences you've posted so far look good, but the next step is to expand this limited coverage (aim for 300-500 words), while also adding your sources, images, etc. Please touch base when the expanded version is up in your sandbox, based on the strength of what you've already done I'm very optimistic that the full entry will be terrific. ALMc — Preceding unsigned comment added by AMcClanan (talk • contribs) 15:05, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

John Epps feedback 11/28 There were powerful women in the ancient world even though they were viewed as lesser citizens. I enjoyed how the author captured the people of the times view. Details about women's daily life were informative and straightforward. How the women weren't allowed to serve in court or experience rights that males held. Liked how the author laid out their restrictions. I didn't see a mention of Domina or women that owned gladiators if there was ever a thing. The roles at home were stated clearly as well. Even going into the marriage expectations for these women very detailed and inclusive. I also liked the detail where "Examples of abuse amongst lower class families are difficult to find and only skeletal remains can tell those stories". Great how the author had the execption to the rule with Corneila Africana the daughter of Scipio Africanus. Would have enjoyed a picture of one of them if possible. Spelling and Grammar is solid and the flow is smooth. Allowing for a easy read for the audience. Yet I can still hear the writers voice in the words. A/B — Preceding unsigned comment added by VikingEpps (talk • contribs) 04:08, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Prof McClanan, 12/6
Excellent work, Rhiannon!

AMcClanan (talk) 02:33, 7 December 2018 (UTC)