User talk:Rickb928

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Hi - welcome to Wikipedia. I have a few friendly suggestions regarding your article Avatar (computer game) that will make it more valuable as a Wikipedia article: Thanks for your contribution! CDC (talk) 00:34, 6 December 2005 (UTC)
 * 1) The introduction doesn't start with a basic description of the game for someone (like me) who has never heard of it. I want to know when it was made, by who, and perhaps what sort of game it was.
 * 2) The article should link to others - just put square brackets around a word to add a link.
 * 3) The article is written in a very informal style, using the first person ("I remember", etc) - Wikipedia articles are usually written more formally, and shouldn't read like a personal essay. This needs to be cleaned up.
 * 4) It's important to keep your personal opinions out of the article; Wikipedia articles must be written from a neutral point of view.


 * Hi again. Don't worry about your writing - you write well, really, and I hope you'll stick to it. The only issue is that there's a certain way Wikipedia articles are written, in terms of the formatting and the way we say things.  One suggestion would be to take a look at a few articles about similar topics, or to look at Featured articles - most of our articles aren't as good as the featured ones, but that's kind of what we're going for.  What you've got is a good start toward an article, it just needs some editing and some additions.  I'd remove some of the specifics about how you played the game, unless you have evidence that they are/were widely-used techniques. Make sure you aren't expressing your opinion about the game; if you can quote publications that wrote reviews, or something, that's great, though. CDC (talk) 17:21, 8 December 2005 (UTC)