User talk:RiesUCSD/sandbox

Need more clarification on what you are changing in existing article
Not clear how what you are writing fits into existing article. Can you start a new article on a narrower topic? Found your sources on the Discussion Topic in Triton Ed---Please add them here. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:01, 13 November 2018 (UTC)

Almost ready to publish
Dear Mr Ries I like your narrower topic, presuming that this is a totally new article? You don't have any FN, but your sources are fine. We need to check with Wikipedia to see if actual FN are necessaryI think so. Good re the pics. Giving you 5 more points, and once we clarify re the FN, you should sail into the next 15 points. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:06, 20 November 2018 (UTC)

finalizing your article
Dear Mr Ries Good work, you are almost finished. Your prose is not quite up to snuff. You have incomplete sentences and typos. Can you take your text to the Teaching and Learning Commons and ask them to help you edit this? Or can you copy your article into a word document and I will help you edit it? DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 06:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC)

Work left to do on your article
Dear Mr Ries

You need to explain/show how your article fits into existing articles already up. Your prose will need a lot of work to finalize. Have you visited the Teaching and Learning Commons? The "honorable mention" section seems to have a problematic title. Your sources are fine although the method of citation needs a lot of work. 15 points so far. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 15:38, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

Still not ready to publish
Dear Mr Ries

In order to obtain the last 15 points of your assignment, you will need several more hours of editing. If you copy and paste your article into a word format, with a large font and double spacing, I can edit it during your final.

You have raised several topics which you do not have full enough information or have written in a sloppy manner. These sentences will need to be eliminated or documented more fully.

Your sources are academic enough, but the style of referencing needs quite a bit of editing.

DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 03:47, 14 December 2018 (UTC)

Ready to publish
Good work and good luck among the wikipedians. DH--DHertzGSR (talk) 19:31, 18 December 2018 (UTC)