User talk:Rileybathauer/sandbox

Proposed Edits
I think your first edit to Our Revolution could be even more concise! Something like the following could work:


 * Howard Dean and Jesse Jackson, former unsuccessful Democratic Presidential Candidates, have previously launched progressive organizations that have not gained momentum.

Just a grammatical fix on Our Revolution's fourth edit:


 * During the 2016 Election, the organization supports several ballot measures and candidates who have shown a higher chance of winning elections.

I'm curious as to the relevancy of Google Drive to Brand New Congress and its history. Maybe that addendum can be omitted, or if the relevancy is present, maybe it can be expanded upon?

One way to expand Brand New Congress could be to add the specific issues they care about when supporting candidates (expanding on aligning with Bernie's views).

You are working well towards the goal of editing 3-5 articles and using 30 sources!

Response to Peer: Thank you! I agree with the edits you have suggested and will begin to move forward by finding more sources and posting drafts on talk pages that I will edit. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 50.1.48.189 (talk) 00:17, 12 November 2016 (UTC)