User talk:RiverSong84/Land Run of 1892

Feedback from Dr. Hyde
'''You’ve made huge progress here. I can see all the sections laid out about the 1892 Land Run. And the sources that you have begun to add are already far better than what was there.'''

1)    Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite

'''You’ve made huge progress here. You’ve added sections of new writing and filled in more about the Indigenous story that came before this. Great! The piece that you might want to add, and mostly you can link to it, is the 1874 Red River War that allows the U.S. Army to clear out most of western Oklahoma.'''

And you’ve already figured out how to put in images and maps.

2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)

'''As you add more citations to the paragraphs here, look for more journal articles about the Comanches, Cheyennes, and Arapahoes to explain why they have so little control compared to the Five Tribes. Again, the Red River War and the Comanche “outbreak,” create a different vibe in Western Oklahoma.'''

'Some older books about the military history piece: Utley, Robert M. 1973, Frontier Regulars the United States Army and the Indian, 1866-1891; Haley, James L. The Buffalo War : The History of the Red River Indian Uprising of 1874'' Norman: University of Oklahoma Press, 1985. We have all of these in various formats.'''

3.    Written 50-60% of what you hope to add

'''Absolutely did this!! But you have to decide how much time you have for this. You could, at this point, decide to finish out the sections you think matter the most and leave the rest.'''

4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background

'''Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles. You’ve already done some of this, but I think you need more about the various Indian nations in your article.'''

5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs

You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while.

GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 80/80

Afh1858 (talk) 17:35, 9 November 2023 (UTC)Afh1858 (talk) 17:36, 9 November 2023 (UTC)