User talk:RjR5789/R’s Queer and Trans Social Movement Rhetoric, Queer Archives, and LGBTQ+ youth and rhetoric

C's Peer Review
Hey R! Great start with your first topic! They did start with a great topic sentence, and I was able to understand how the paragraph will be used to fit in their overall section. They did avoid words to watch in their writing. They also avoided using jargon. They did write in third person, however was not able to tell which article they were talking about. Three great sources were cited but not within the paragraph. May need more information about each source to support your topic overall. For the citations I would recommend using the DOI numbers for other users to find the sources that aren't Texas State students. They didn't use big quotes from the articles. (Chelseaaaaa 2024 (talk) 01:59, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Dr. E's Review
R, thanks for getting this going in your first draft. This will need updating to avoid the Wiki Words to Watch like homophobia, transphobia, hatefulness, etc. It is a very specific writing style, so check out the Women’s Studies samples to help with this. It also needs to cite the readings. These are things to work on for re-writing for Thursday. OsaRosa (talk) 08:36, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

B's feedback
Hi @RjR5789, Remember we are writing for an encyclopedia, and an encyclopedia's purpose is to be informative. Your contribution should be a summary of facts, of scholarly ideas that you read in reliable sources. Currently your paragraph kind of reads like more of an opinion piece rather an encyclopedic entry. What does Queer and trans social movement rhetoric mean? What are Queer archives? Are scholars using them for something? Are they being studied, created, what's their importance? Why are these subjects focuses of LGBTQ+ Communication Studies? How does this relate back LGBTQ+ Communication Studies? These are just questions to get thinking about how to shape your contribution.

Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 22:23, 17 April 2024 (UTC)