User talk:Rkhutorsky/sandbox

This looks excellent! You will also be able to 'link' your article to Danai Gurira's article (make sure to check out how her page talks about In the Continuum). Thea365Instructor (talk) 16:43, 26 April 2018 (UTC)

Everything is looking great! I look forward to seeing how this article further develops. Thea365Instructor (talk) 23:14, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Gracie Review
Lead: Great! Just make sure the comments are neutral or you site it. "Best known for.." might not be the best word choice (even if it is true) However, I think your lead sets up a solid structure for your article which you seem to follow nicely.

I love your charts, but it might be helpful for the organization of your article if you intersperse them where they are relevant rather than front load them all.

The organization of your paragraphs on In The Continuum and The Continuum Project was really helpful in following the narrative of a complicated story line. Additionally. I think it is smart to keep the order of In The Continuum, The Continuum Project, and then Advocate because they flow nicely into one another.

Awards and Achievements was great, it was very straight forward and this is a place that would be very easy to unintentionally inflate comments rather than making them neutral, so I commend you for you success in keeping this section unbiased.

You seem to have a lot of great and diverse sources! There are a few places I'd like to point out that you might want to consider adding a footnote to.

- Awards: Continuum being named best play of the year by NY Times -In The Continuum: the play being developed because they wanted to humanize the statistic -In your lead (if you want to keep the line "best known for" maybe site thatTd.gec (talk) 18:20, 17 May 2018 (UTC)

Mia Peer Edit
>I totally agree with everything Gracie said!! I would definitely echo spacing out the charts a bit, maybe even placing them towards the end just because they are kind of abrupt structurally.

>Really, I don't have much to add beyond maybe condensing the In the Continuum section? I feel like this play deserves its own Wikipedia article, but just make sure since you're writing about Salter specifically that you don't get too carried away writing about this specific work. I still definitely agree that In the Continuum deserves its own lengthy section though.

>I would also love if you expanded a bit more about her other plays that you have in the "Playwright" chart. You already have so much material for your article, but if you're looking for new sections to add, that's definitely where I would recommend starting.

>Again, I'd just echo what Gracie said-- this article is really great and you've done a great job keeping the bias out of it. Definitely do a scan over and see if there are more places you can take that bias out (as Gracie mentions with uses of words like "best"). But amazing job! This is so thorough and really gives me a great sense of who Salter is as an artist. Mialenn08 (talk) 18:41, 17 May 2018 (UTC)