User talk:Rlopez60/sandbox

By 12/6/18 we hope to have a solid base to add our article to Wikipedia, since the topic is not currently touched upon. We will meet our goal by clearly organizing headings and subheading, while all of us work on different sections. As this will be a new article, we will work closely with Dr. Lehr to make sure our article body flows smoothly and is unbiased.

We will also be utilizing the new article templates provided by Wikipedia in order to structure our information appropriately. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rlopez60 (talk • contribs) 02:30, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
The article is very good so far, but could benefit from some organizational structure when it comes to each section of discussion. Moreover this topic is overall very interesting to read about and you could expand your articles length immensely. Overall though great job so far! Also i noticed beware of biases and personal opinions or views being intertwined in the article! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jmcrawfo (talk • contribs) 06:37, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Response: Thanks for the feedback! We are currently working on a GoogleDoc to organize our article. We will definitely avoid using biased language throughout our article.

Rlopez Peer Review
The article most importantly could benefit from a longer length. After that the organization on sectioning can be done. I also believe that turning the bullet points into sentences in a paragraph would flow better. I also know you're probably working on all that already. It is hard to tell if there is going to be neutral language since it still needs to be written out, so just a reminder to make it neutral. The topic is interesting, and very much linked to what we are talking about it class. — Preceding unsigned comment added by MaximillianSearles (talk • contribs) 20:46, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Response: Hi Maximilian! I like that you brought up the idea of first writing our article in order to reorganize it after. We will definitely keep this in mind during our next edits. I'm glad you're interested in our topic, thanks for the feedback! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 207.62.170.219 (talk) 03:08, 14 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hello, I originally posted this peer review on your User Talk page on Monday or Tuesday of this week, per the Wikipedia guidelines. My apologies for the repetition.

Thus far, the article contains a good deal of information on a new article. I was impressed by the collection of sources. Obviously, the article is a work in progress so just continue to organize all of the information, and perhaps you could utilize some of the quotes and summarize them in your own words for additional content to the article. Thank you for writing this much needed article!JamieLynexander (talk) 04:52, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Response: Hi Jamie! Thanks for moving your peer review to our Talk page. We are currently working on paraphrasing the quotes we have listed. We will definitely take your advice! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ingridxreyes (talk • contribs) 05:25, 14 November 2018 (UTC)