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Homework for Friday, February 6th
Ben 10

Helpful Solutions
The main problem with this Ben 10 article is the fact that it contains multiple run-on sentences and also misuses punctuation throughout the entire article. A starting solution to help with these problems would be to revise the article and correct any improper uses of punctuation and rewrite any run-on sentences. There are also some issues with clarity in the article as the writer tries to depict the different movies of the show. The best way to fix this would be to go back and make sure that pronouns are properly utilized so as not to confuse readers as to which subject is being mentioned.

Homework for Monday, February 9th
Psychological warfare This source is in need of more references.
 * This is a good article to work on, but be aware that another student from the class has chosen the same article. It shouldn't be a problem - just make sure you use the article talk page to communicate with other editors. If this seems like too much extra work, you can change your article yet again. If you do, don't delete this comment thread. Just add to it. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:51, 11 February 2015 (UTC)

Homework for Thursday, February 11th
Source 1: http://eds.b.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/eds/detail/detail?sid=11483538-24de-49b9-a526-8708fa45e67e%40sessionmgr115&vid=0&hid=117&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#db=edshtl&AN=mdp.39015002229154

Source 2: http://eds.b.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/eds/detail/detail?sid=bdb15c80-325b-4242-b111-aa740b093ab7%40sessionmgr112&vid=0&hid=117&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWRzLWxpdmUmc2NvcGU9c2l0ZQ%3d%3d#db=sih&AN=52975796

Source 3: http://web.b.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/ehost/detail/detail?sid=2f172f51-ad19-40b2-b5b1-8db23f3ba75e%40sessionmgr115&vid=0&hid=115&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZSZzY29wZT1zaXRl#db=a9h&AN=98584472

Source 4: http://web.b.ebscohost.com.libezp.lib.lsu.edu/ehost/detail/detail?sid=9e41215e-2c5b-4bcd-8c78-393b3903a822%40sessionmgr112&vid=0&hid=115&bdata=JnNpdGU9ZWhvc3QtbGl2ZSZzY29wZT1zaXRl#db=a9h&AN=94263404 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rmoor57 (talk • contribs) 23:04, 11 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I can't see all the links, but what I can see looks good. Josef Horáček (talk) 00:27, 17 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Good job with the assignment. I like your helpful comment on the article's talk page. Did you ever communicate with the other editor in our class? Josef Horáček (talk) 20:09, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Homework for Friday, February 20th (adding a lead section)
Japanese swords in fiction — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rmoor57 (talk • contribs) 03:24, 19 February 2015 (UTC)

Homework for Monday, Februrary 23rd
Though missing a lead, I see no problems with the flow of the article. The main issue with the article is its subject content. While the name of the article is "Japanese swords in fiction," the article only ever refers to the katana in fiction. Besides this, there is no other major issue with the article. All of the points, both major and minor, are given appropriate and equal weight in the article, and there is no issue with the order that the information is presented in. Rmoor57 (talk) 19:27, 22 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Good choice. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:10, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Lead
In the real world, the katana is a normal Japanese sword only caught up in the legends of it origins. In fiction, however, the sword carries legends of its strength and superiority over other weapons which have caused it to be a central weapon in fiction both in and outside of Japan. Americans, Europeans, and Asians have all incorporated the katana into all styles of fiction ranging from games and comics to even television.Rmoor57 (talk) 22:56, 25 February 2015 (UTC)
 * This lead still needs to be developed. Since the article is on Japanese swords in general, shouldn't you start with saying something general about Japanese swords? What's different about them, what kinds they are, how they were used and by whom. Then focus on the katana. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:32, 1 March 2015 (UTC)