User talk:Rmsphoto/Sandbox

Comments as per your request
Certainly better - however the following are still very pertinent before we move it to mainspace: Read WP:Spam - I think at a first glance (other than the fact that it does not meet WP:MOS) that the section titled Other Names (and external links) - has too many links and also is likely in a large part get deleted as spam links.
 * 1) Read WP:Lede - Does it stand alone as a concise overview of the article? (Not at this time)
 * 2) Read WP:MOS - Much of the headings do not at this stage follow this guideline.
 * 3) Read WP:Notability - This is the big one - without passing this stage you won't make it past your next AfD - so tell readers eswactly why the topic of an article is notable, or "worthy of notice" - at this stage it only reflects that Cursillo is notable - why exactly is this off-shoot notable?

Call me when you get through these parts - it will take you a few days probably (unless you have a good deal of free time) and then I will go through it with a fine tooth comb and grade it also.-- VS talk 10:22, 31 January 2008 (UTC)

Thanks, VS. I will work on this some more. But it will be a few more days, as I am the middle of a large project at work Rmsphoto (talk) 02:14, 7 February 2008 (UTC).