User talk:RobieHillier/Evaluate an Article

Hi Robie - thanks for your assessment of the "Music in West Africa" Wikipedia article. I do have a couple of thoughts to offer:


 * the lead section shouldn't introduce things not discussed in the article -- if it lists a bunch of genres that aren't actually described in the article, then the lead section probably needs to be rewritten;
 * you refer to "the author" several times but it's quite likely that there were several authors over time;
 * why do you think "popular music" deserves to be the first section in this article? if it largely deals with western-influenced forms of music, maybe it should go last?
 * you might want to compare this article to other "Music in..." articles in Wikipedia -- that would give you a sense of other sections that might be included, as well as a good structure;

I'm not convinced that this is the best article for you to edit. To write an article on "Music in West Africa" requires a lot of knowledge about the different musics in West Africa, instruments, genres, etc. While you could write about specific elements, it would make more sense to me to focus on the articles about different elements. Later, you could summarize some of this information in this general article. What happens if you search for "West African drumming" in Wikipedia, for example?

--CBFraoch (talk) 18:07, 5 October 2021 (UTC)