User talk:Rockchalk717/Archives/2022/August

Luke Bell Death Section
Your source listed inaccuracies such as theorizing the cause of death was from new medication for his bi-polar. There has been no official cause of death.

Nowhere in your source lists him being at a concert. After going through multiple sources it only mentioned he was with Matt. Bell later left to get something to eat. You said his body was found in Arizona after you mentioned disappearing in Tuscon. Very vague but his body was actually found close to where he disappeared. Trying not to sound harsh, but please check multiple sources when posting something especially something as specific as to what lead to his death. I have never heard of this man. I’m sure some fans would go to wiki to read about it. Anyways, what’s done is done. Hope you like the change and hopefully mine doesn’t get erased.

James Karaokelegend (talk) 15:28, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I actually have multiple issues with your edit. Number 1, per WP:SURNAME, after initially referring to someone by their full legal name in the lede sentence, they should only be referred to by their last name. Second, when a condition is listed, it's usually preferred to link the condition, as is the case with his bi-polar disorder. Third, information that is sourced should not be removed. Not sure how much you know about bi-polar disorder but a change in medication for someone with the condition can cause a lot of issues. Fourth, avoid using euphemisms like "bite to eat" or "vanished". Disappeared and out to eat is sufficient. Fifth, after a date, there should always be a comma.-- Rockchalk 717 15:44, 31 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I have reverted while fixing the inaccurate parts of the initial edit.-- Rockchalk 717 15:47, 31 August 2022 (UTC)