User talk:Rocko1569/sandbox

Really great explanations. This article was very nicely worded. Despite there not being a lot of information out there about Dercums disease, I was very impressed how you were able to incorporate all the necessary information and felt that I was able to understand the gist of the disease.

I would suggest putting the abstract section above the table of contents (see "lead" in wiki manual) and adding some links to other wiki pages. For instance, it would be nice to have a link to the adipose tissue page. Also, are there any "warning signs" to add to the symptoms section? I believe you mentioned the warning signs in the diagnosis section, which may be obesity.

I really liked the "Causes" and "Treatment" sections. A lot of good information there! I'm not sure what was meant by "multiples on the extremities" in the abstract section. Was there any information about how obesity is linked to tumor formation that could explain the mechanism?

Rebecca Johnson Rjohns81 (talk) 15:08, 8 November 2015 (UTC)Rjohns81

Sweiner02 (talk) 22:26, 18 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Drop the heading. The full page will add its own, and this just makes your formatting confusing.
 * Don't use subheadings unless they add something. I would definitely leave them out of your abstract.
 * Mechanism: We don't know the cause, but you can discuss the pathophysiology: what's happening and how does it lead to symptoms.
 * Very clear symptom descriptions.
 * Add links to other wikipedia pages.
 * There's a lot of good detail on treatment on the current page. You should incorporate that.
 * A quick google scholar search found some cool recent stuff on treatments and possible mechanisms. You should make sure to include that.