User talk:Rooshnam/sandbox

Hi! Here is where I will give you some comments. Make sure to get material in your sandbox to show that you are making progress with this project. If you are having trouble with where to start, ask ASAP. LETHORNTON

I can tell that you are making progress in learning about the species. Remember that you need to meet the requirements of this assignment by reviewing primary literature. This is a fairly obscure plant, but I think you can find more scientific information. The links to web pages and such do not count as scientific sources, but you do need to link to other wikipedia articles for similar species and comparisons to other information. I found an number of sources, but let me know if you need help getting the papers to read. Lethornton (talk) 22:08, 16 March 2018 (UTC)

Tanisha Peer Review
Good information overall. The article definitely needs to be expanded much more in terms of content but I see you have the sources listed so that is something you’re still working on (sources 1-9).

Good use of Contents Box, it outlines the article clearly. Also, good use of subheadings. Once you start expanding on sources, make sure to have good organization of the subheadings. For example, “Annual vs. Perennials” and “Life cycle of Annuals” should be near each other, etc. Also make sure that each subheading gets about an equal amount of information. One section shouldn’t dominate or have way more info than all the others.

Your sources seem to be reliable sources but just make sure all links are accessible. If not, do the manual citation.

According to the peer review training, there should be lead on top of the article which represents the most important information.

The sentence “this tree has its variations from them” might be incorrect grammar. Instead, maybe change the sentence to “Although this tree shares many similar traits to other Sweet gum trees, such as…., it varies in some characteristics as well.”

Also, correct the next sentence to “Liquidambar acalycina is a deciduous tree (that) has a brown….”

Sentence should be “Leaves contain three peaks and are similar to Maple leaves.”

Too many commas in the sentence “The leaves start…”. There should be only one comma “after summer,”

May should be capitalized

What does you mean by “but are insignificant”?

Should be “brown-black” or brownish black

Maybe shorten the next sentence to “The plant serves as a good source of shade”. This sentence you have seems more flowery (not what wiki wants).

Next sentence could be better grammatically: It prefers an acidic, clay-based soil that is provided ample sunlight”.

In Disease/Pest section, “in which it exists” because you said “This three” not “these trees”. Put a link to what iron chlorosis is or explain it which a citation. (To do this, just click on the link button next to the cite button at the top of sandbox and type in iron chlorosis).

TanishaNair (talk) 01:17, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Instructor comments: It looks like you got a lot of suggestions from Tanisha that you need to work through. Before you spend too much time on the details of grammar, make sure that you have enough content. Currently, it is not clear that you have used enough scientific sources of information to meet the requirements of the assignment, but you need to put the citations in place to show what information came from each source. Please make sure to expand your writing to paragraphs and think about how you will incorporate what you have to say into the bit that is already on the page for this species. It would help to compare to other species or add to the uses of this plant. Make sure to link to other pages if you are adding information that relates to other wikipedia entries.Lethornton (talk) 21:58, 15 April 2018 (UTC)