User talk:Rosarrob/sandbox

Walter Bowring article suggestions

 * The title for Reference [1] is not correct. I recommend "Bowring, Walter Armiger, 1874-1931". Alexander Turnbull Library is the publisher.
 * there is a valuable source that you don't seem to have cited yet. See: https://tiaki.natlib.govt.nz/#details=ethesaurus.92616
 * The first sentence includes date of birth and date of death. It needs an inline citation to back up the dates, placed at the end of the first sentence. I suggest copying the existing citation of the obituary notice, and pasting it here. (I think you have done this before, but in Edit mode, in the text of the article, hover and left click on the citation number that you want to copy. Then cntl-c to copy, move to where you want to paste, left click, then cntl-v to paste)
 * The existing Reference [1] goes to a search result showing multiple search hits. Did you intend to cite a single source ? – if so, amend url link so it goes to the right page, and update the title. (The reader should not have to work through all the search responses to find the source that backs up the statement)
 * ..of his early work in contained in the Alexander Turnbull Library, Wellington should be "..is contained in ..". Also please add wikilinks to Alexander Turnbull Library, and to Wellington.
 * The existing Reference [4] also goes to a search result showing multiple search hits. Did you intend to cite a single source ? – if so, amend url link so it goes to the right page, and update the title
 * what was Sydney's Archibald Prize ? A few words of context would help
 * many words/ topics need wikilinks. (use the chain symbol in the menu bar to bring up a box where you can enter the name of the article to link to). In most cases it will prompt you anyway. Only link the first occurrence of the word/term in the article. However, for cases like New Zealand Archives, you will have to enter Archives New Zealand (because that is the name of the article). Some examples that need wikilinks include:
 * World War I
 * Richard John Seddon, William Ferguson Massey, Harold Beauchamp, William Rolleston etc
 * National Portrait Gallery of Australia
 * William Orpen and Augustus John
 * New Zealand Expeditionary Force
 * Royal Institute of Oil Painters
 * etc


 * Bowring was educated at Auckland Grammar.. This needs a citation, but this fact is stated in the obituary, so you can again just copy the citation and paste it at the end of this sentence.
 * Reference [6] - the title should be: "Bowring, Walter v Bowring, Maria Millicent" as per the source
 * Bowring's early works were black and white sketches for the Auckland Observer.. Is there a citation for this ?
 * The existing reference 7 has a title that is fairly long. I would remove OTHER. Also, edit the citation using the edit function in the citation template, to remove the hidden return character in the title field that is currently causing an error message.
 * New Zealand Ilustrated magazine should be "New Zealand Illustrated magazine"
 * ...studied under Sir William Orpen Note that Wikipedia does not usually include honorific titles in this kind of context. See MOS:SIR
 * Is reference [5] appropriate at the end of this first paragraph under Career ? What part of the text does it support ?.
 * Is reference [12] appropriate at the end of the first paragraph under Career ? It is an image of him painting, but is that what you intended to cite ?
 * n 1918 he applied unsuccessfully to become an official war artist for New Zealand, but the Government preferred to appoint those already serving with the New Zealand Expeditionary Force, or living overseas,. I recommend copying/pasting citation [15} here (the Homecoming). There is very close paraphrasing of the source here, so ideally rework the sentence a bit more. Also change comma at the end to a full stop.
 * Works featured in an exhibition of War Art arranged by the National Archives in 2011 included The Departure of HNZT 13 SS Verdela and 14 RMS Willochra from Lyttellton on December 5 1914, the Departure of the hospital ship Maheno and the poignant Homecoming from Gallipolli, painted in 1916.
 * I suggest Works by Bowring featured ...
 * check for consistency in the use of italics in this sentence
 * check spelling of Gallipoli
 * This paragraph needs a citation
 * spelling of "Lyttelton" is not correct, and wikilink to Lyttelton Harbour


 * On a visit to England in 1921-23 he was elected a member of the Royal Institute of Oil Painters, and the Chelsea Art Club and exhibited at the Royal Academy and the Royal Portrait Society in London. He was a contributor to London Punch and other English journals..
 * A citation is needed at the end of this paragraph
 * * Suggest changing Royal Portrait Society to Royal Society of Portrait Painters and wikilinking to Royal Society of Portrait Painters


 * Fourteen of Bowring's portraits were hung in the Art Gallery of NSW's Archibald Prize between 1925 and 1931..
 * The cited source does not back up the claim of 14 works
 * NSW needs to be in its expanded form on the first occurrence, eg "New South Wales (NSW)"
 * the sentence needs a bit of rework - portraits are hung in a gallery or exhibition or show, but not in a prize.

* The Archibald Prize is awarded annually to the best portrait, 'preferentially of some man or woman distinguished in art, letters, science or politics, painted by any artist resident in Australasia'. This open competition is judged by the trustees of the Art Gallery of NSW. The second sentence is a direct copy from the source, so should be reworked a bit to avoid violating copyright. Note: you can run a check for copy violations using the tool: https://copyvios.toolforge.org/ Just enter the page title into the box and press submit. It works within a minute or two, usually very quick. For your sandbox, you would enter: User:Rosarrob/sandbox Nearly there - only a few points to resolve. Marshelec (talk) 06:31, 21 August 2023 (UTC)
 * add wikilink for James Oswald Fairfax (link to James Fairfax)


 * Phew - I think! But can't find where that 2011 exhibition came from. Answerd Archibald query and backed up source with National Portrait Gallery. More tomorrow! Rosarrob (talk) 09:48, 21 August 2023 (UTC)