User talk:Rosemv123/Ana Maria Rey

--Rosemv123 (talk) 01:07, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

Draft Feedback
Hi - This is a great start! I've got some feedback mostly about encyclopedic tone.
 * First sentence: there are some grammar issues and I'm not sure about the context of her work not being recognized in Colombia. You'll want to make sure you adhere closely to what the source is saying so that it doesn't come off as you trying to draw conclusions for the reader
 * Second sentence: I would combine this with the third sentence and remove the whole first part about where the interview took place. Starting with "she had been approached" is great. The reason for this is that readers can learn about where she said it from the citation. The important part of the content is what she said
 * Background/research section: I would recommend trying to expand this a little. You can base it off of the research section for M. Lisa Manning. A little more context and it should be good to go!

This is such a great start! Let me know if you have more questions! Will (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:39, 12 October 2020 (UTC)