User talk:Rp8848/sandbox

This contribution is looking really great! You’ve contributed a significant amount of useful information. You’ve used really great sources from reliable academic journals as well.

The comments on leaf toughness are a great addition. It might be useful to reword the sentence “tougher leaves correlates negatively with ingestion but positively with investment” just to give a bit more explanation, and also to make the information easier to understand.

There was a lot of good research that went into the social patterns and morphology paragraph. I really like that you explained the appearance of allomothering and explained what this means as well. It’s also great to have included possible reasons that this is seen. You might be able to add another sentence at the end just to explain how this will specifically benefit future offspring, and perhaps a wikilink to a page about inclusive fitness (or a definition).

The paragraph about social behaviours is really interesting. I am wondering if you might be able to find sources that support the two you have included, so that the information on each topic isn’t from a single source. The paragraphs are really clear and well organized and keep a neutral tone.

The paragraph on predators and threat level is a good topic to include and expand upon. This paragraph might benefit from some more information about the types of predators and methods of predator evasion. The sentence you have that says “there is a positive correlation between mean monthly vigilance and encounter rates” is also very interesting and might be able to be explained a bit more.

Overall I think this article is really well done. You have organized it logically and have included some great topics, information and sources. I think the main thing to improve on may just be explaining a bit more on some of the points you have made. Great job!

Peer Review of Black-and-white colobus by KaleighSmith: Great contributions! You’ve added a lot of useful information, and your sources are reliable. I have some suggestions, mostly based on sentence structure.

Habitat and Food “Tougher leaves correlate… positivitely with investment”. I think you should explain this investment further.

Social Patterns and Morphology - “1-male”, there doesn’t need to be a “-“.

- Maybe reword this part: “However, variation in structure and the number of males present have more recently been observed”. I think it would read better as “However, more recent observations have shown variation in structure and the number of males within groups”

- “Relationships among females are considered to be resident-egalitarian…”

- “Juveniles are treated as a lower-rank than subadults and likewise when comparing subadults to adults”. It may be useful to explain what it means to be treated as a “lower-rank”.

Social Behaviours - “They sleep in trees near their food source, which may serve to save energy.”

Overall, great job! Once you add a little more information, your article will be perfect! KaleighSmith (talk) 19:25, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer- review of Black-and-white colobus by Rd989:

You should make your title a proper title by using the heading section, and instead of underlining your paragraphs, you can make them actual headings by clicking paragraph. Your title is just a citation so far, so it is unclear what your sandbox is on. You should take out anything you are not using in your sandbox, such as your uncited sentence “They are prey for many forest predators, and are threatened by hunting for the bushmeat trade, logging, and habitat destruction”. You could possibly elaborate on the habitat and food section more, or put it all together in one paragraph, as it is small. There is only 1 sentence about the introduction in the original Wikipedia article, so it might be a good idea to expand upon this and add more information. Your first sentence also does not have a citation, along with some other sentences. All the references listed seem to be working and peer reviewed. You could also try adding an image or two for visual clarification. Overall great job :) !