User talk:Ruckers2j/sandbox

I like what you have so far. I do have some notes that could maybe clear up some of the questions I had after reading your initial stuff. Also, there were some grammatical issues I saw that I didn't correct because it hasn't been transferred to the actual article page yet. But I can definitely look at it again once it has been. And I also just want to make sure you cite everything appropriately when you move your stuff over.

Background: I didn't feel as if this section really gave me a sense of the background information regarding what led up to the letter, or the climate of the time. I wasn't sure how some of the things you wrote related to the topic specifically. I just don't know what type of background info you're trying to convey; if it was more for information on the Choctaws, or the political environment of the time. Maybe if you were a little more direct and elaborate more on the topic, I would feel better informed.

Pre-Letter Events: I think you should put a link to the Treaty of Dancing Rabbit Creek page if there is one, or add more background on the subject if there isn't. Also, I didn't know if this was a continuance of background information or not. Or if this was supposed to provide insight into the catalyst of why the letter was written. I just didn't really grasp the section's importance, or really what was going on.

Aftermath & Impact: These subjects weren't really that specific. I think if you narrowed your sight to the specific of this letter, it would validate your points more.

Also, final note. I still don't know what the letter said, or its real importance. I think if you expanded on the contents of the letter itself, that would help clarify some of these other issues.

Mariah1160 (talk) 03:37, 1 April 2015 (UTC)