User talk:Ryleymac/sandbox

Peer Review by Reid -

Slave Craton - No notes

Central Slave Basement Complex - No notes

Back River Volcanic Complex - Where is this?

Central Slave Cover Group - Does this supracrustal sequence occur over the entire Slave craton? What are its extents?

Kam Group - Where is this sequence the thickest (6km) and where is it thinnest (0.3km). Does the sequence thickness grade continuously? Does the Kam group occur over the entire Slave craton?

Banting Group - The contact between the lower units of what and the Banting group mark a disconformity?

Jackson Lake Formation - Same questions as before. Is it laterally continuous across the entire slave?

Evolution of the Slave Craton - Are you describing the evolution here? What about the relative timings of the amalgamations of the Back River Volcanic Complex, the CSCG, the Kam group, the Banting group, and the Jackson lake formation. Discussing how these all came together in sequence might be a good idea.

Craton Stabilization - How is continental lithospheric mantle growth achieved at 2.75 Ga?

First Known Breakup - Which of these models is most/least likely based on what evidences? Might be a good closing paragraph.

Overall - Some small spelling mistakes, forgetting of periods (particularly in the last section "First Known Breakup"), otherwise just clarification about the different groups would be beneficial. Your article I found to be well written and very concise. I think what might be a good addition is a diagrammatic figure showing the relative positions of all the groups and formations you discussed. Referencing the figure while reading I would personally find beneficial, as there is enough geologic terminology in your writing for readers to forget the overall geologic context. ReidMerrill (talk) 03:41, 30 March 2017 (UTC)

ReidMerrill (talk) 21:30, 28 March 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review by Mike

Back River Volcanic Complex:

The Back River Volcanic Complex needs some context to it. It seems like it is a stand alone paragraph that doesn't fit with the rest of the article and doesn't appear to be mentioned anywhere else in the article.

Yellowknife Supergroup:

Several terms used in this paragraph could use links to help understand them such as "greenstone belts", "greenschist", and "amphibolite" facies. The last sentence in this paragraph could use some reworking, it is awkward to read.

Central Slave Cover Group:

In the second sentence it may be a good idea to distinguish the meaning of "quartzite production" as the first thing that popped into my head when reading this was about quarrying. Maybe quartzite formation might be less ambiguous? The last sentence of this paragraph seems like it would fit better at the end of the Central Slave Basement Complex paragraph. There are also several technical terms that could use links for clarification.

Kam Group:

It is mentioned that the upper Kam Group contains three formations, maybe state what these formations are? Again there are some more technical terms here that could use links to help understand them.

Banting Group:

This paragraph could expand a bit more on the Banting Group, it seems to be unbalanced with the previous groups in terms of content.

Jackson Lake Group:

Same as Banting Group, could use more information to balance with the other preceding groups in this section.

Evolution of Slave Craton:

It might be a good idea to retitle this section or expand on it to include the evolution of the Slave Craton from beginning to end. The paragraph written here seems to delineate information about the early formation of the Slave Craton but not about it's entire evolution from start to finish.

Craton Stabilization:

There are multiple spelling errors in this paragraph. In the third to last sentence remove the word "attributed" it doesn't fit at the end of this sentence.

First Known Breakup:

This section would benefit from a retitle as it is vague about what it is referring to. This section could also be expanded upon to maybe mention which theory/model is the most likely given the current information known.

References:

References 1-10 are lacking in their information and could be updated to include the full name of the article and what journal/source they were published in.

General:

Generally the layout of the article is logical and easy to follow. There are some spelling and grammar mistakes that could be easily removed by reading through a couple times. Many of the technical terms used in the Yellowknife Supergroup section would benefit greatly if they were linked to a page describing them (if that page exists, of course). Mkerkovius (talk) 03:50, 30 March 2017 (UTC)