User talk:Rz2345/Slanted screen

Since you have not completed the article body yet, I will comment on the Synopsis and when you finish the article body I will add onto my peer review.

I thought that for the most part you guys did a good job at keeping a neutral tone, especially considering this is a very opinionated topic. I thought that the introductory paragraph did a fantastic job at introducing the subject and did so in a neutral tone. With that being said I think the second paragraph is a little opinionated stating, "The effect of these portrayals were powerful." While that statement might be true I think in order to get that point across in a more neutral tone it would be beneficial to build a little more upon why they were so powerful.

I also think the paragraphs on Bruce Lee and the affect it had on the Asian community was written extremely well. That being said I think it would be beneficial to add a Heading to that section in order to have better structure for the article. I also think that including more Wiki links to other articles (like adding a Wiki link on Bruce Lee's name to the Wikipedia page about Bruce Lee) would also be beneficial.

Overall I thought you did a great job on the synopsis and look forward to reading the article body when you complete it. Trevorh910 (talk) 23:46, 4 February 2022 (UTC)