User talk:SMSouth/Valentín Valdés Espinosa

This article gives an outline of who Valentin was and a brief idea of what happened to end his life. However, many more details are needed to ensure a complete mental image as to what exactly happened to Valentin. The basic information was present and supported with resources, but there are many things that could be discussed to complete the entire story. The section named "death" could use more details about what exactly happened that night so that some of the actions that occured during certain times were discussed. The "context" section included great details about the city but did not pulling the city and Valentin close together and relate them. The other sections simply need more information. However, if no more information is available, more details should be elaborated in these sections. It is important that you are careful about grammatical and spelling errors throughout this article. Also, you might try to vary your sentence structures so that the piece flows better when read. If these small improvements are made, this article has great potential. Good luck! NoLiesAllFacts (talk) 04:42, 6 October 2011 (UTC)