User talk:SRMiranda18/sandbox

Peer Review (Akua Jonah)
Overall I think its good. I think organizationally it flows well with the original article topic and you enhanced the overall quality/quantity.

Intro: Still needs to be done, but the work that has been done should help make a great intro statement. Summary: Good. I had no idea what !WAR was and now I do. Context/Content: Everything is easy to understand, concise, and fits well with the topic of the article. Here are a couple of suggestions and minor typos I noticed: I would wiki link the Political events in the synopsis and the 1968 Miss America with their respective wiki articles. In the reception section for Richard Knight I would say he criticized the film instead of saying he was more critical of the films shortcomings but I think either works. Also there is a typo in the word woman on the fourth line of the Richard Knight segment. Also I think Hershman's name is spelled incorrectly in the Elizabeth Subrin quote.I liked how you got a variety of sources for reception, not all positive or negative. Organization: I really like your interviewees table with the links to each person. I'm sure that took a lot of time, but it looks great. Citations: To figure out how to do my sources I searched Wiki for how to cite comic books and followed the format. If that doesn't work/if you don't want to do that most article depending on the website have a cite button. You just click it and choose your citation style. I would probably check the citation it gives you with other citations to make sure all the relevant information is included. Sources: Good variety of sources. Completeness: I think between what you have added, what you will add, and what is already present, there isn't much left out that I can think of. Maybe get more info on where the film has been shown. Like where in terms of just college campuses, or movie theaters or film festivals. Although that may be really hard to find. I looked at other comic book Wiki pages for inspiration so maybe you could look at other documentary wiki pages. AaayJay (talk) 13:23, 19 April 2018 (UTC)