User talk:SSchaffer1/Goals, Plans, Action Theory

Instructor feedback for article draft
Great start to your article. I think you are covering the main aspects of the theory well and building in some nice depth and breadth. Here are a few suggestions for improvement as you revise.

The lead section has an appropriate length and content. The first sentence could be revised for clarity and readability. It is a little cumbersome now. I think you could add a background section and move the information about Dillard to that section.

The assumptions section concisely presents the main assumptions of the theory. Try to make the style more approachable though. For example, avoid academic language such as "ontological." The writing should be approachable to a wide audience.

The concepts section highlights the main components of the theory, but there could be a little more depth. What is the big difference between primary and secondary goals? Why are they called primary and secondary? How does an individual select goals? Providing a little more information or examples for each of the primary and secondary goals would provide much needed depth in these sub-sections. Giving an example of strategy plans and tactical plans would be helpful. When you state "action can be through verbal and non-verbal messages" is there any alternative? Is it possible to have actions that are not verbal or nonverbal? Revise this sentence accordingly. Explaining the dimensions more would be helpful. What do you mean by "the higher these are"? What does higher mean in this context? The applications section offers some good examples. Spend less space on how the study was conducted (e.g., avoid terms like "likert scale") and more space on the findings and implications. Describe the secondary goals in the academic relationships study. The summary for the personal relationships study (Samp and Solomon) seems too vague and could be more specific. Relate the findings back to how it might affect people's everyday lives.

The critique section is adequate.

Remember to use APA style to format your references. For example, use initials for author first names. Jrpederson (talk) 03:05, 11 October 2019 (UTC)

Review Response
Thank you for your feedback. I will make the adjustments you recommended. --SSchaffer1 (talk) 21:37, 13 October 2019 (UTC)SSchaffer1