User talk:SacStatestudent

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Hello, SacStatestudent, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Help me!
I need to list my choices for articles to my talk page and do not know how. Can you assist me please?

Please help me with...

SacStatestudent (talk) 17:33, 8 March 2016 (UTC) SacStatestudent


 * I have no idea what you mean by "choices for articles", but you seem to have figured it out below. That said, you can create a bulleted list by using asterisks, like this:
 * One bullet point
 * Another bullet point
 * You can add links to your chosen articles with double square brackets:  gives California Senate Bill X7-7. You may also want to take a look at the tutorial. Huon (talk) 20:05, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

my article choices
California Senate Bill X7-7 The 2030 Challenge Vieques, Puerto Rico Bioluminescent Bay SacStatestudent (talk) 17:38, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

Outline feedback
Hi Cindy,

Your outline looks good and this page will make an important contribution. You're missing some sources that you're going to use. Hopefully you can also find out how the 20% number was arrived at and how it's being differentiated (some higher, some lower) among different utilities in its implementation.

Julianfulton (talk) 21:37, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hey Cindy! You have started off your article well, the only thing I can think of doing in the lead in is maybe adding a little bit more background such as who proposed the law and when it was proposed just so there is more background for the reader. You have organized it really well, there is a clear and concise structure to your article, I especially like how you have a subheading where you intend to go into depth regarding each topic. Balance of coverage is good you were not off topic at all and I think that once you go back and add more details to other sections where you stated you intend to each portion of the article will be filled and have an equal amount of content. You have neutral content, there is no clear viewpoint and your article is unbiased, so that is good. Also your sources are reliable, the only thing is that your links between the citation and references section is not present but other than that great start! Jaskamal.K (talk) 01:49, 20 April 2016 (UTC)Jaskamal.K

Response To Peer Review
Hi Jas. Thank you for taking the time to read and critique my page. I really like your idea about beefing up the lead in. I am adding another paragraph or so on the author, why he wrote it, and whether he thinks it has been successful. Thanks for the vote of confidence regarding the page. I feel better knowing it does not sound stupid. I had a little trouble adding references and citations to the page. I am going to go back over the tutorial on that and hopefully that will clear up my confusion. Thanks again, for participating in this process and helping me create a better page. SacStatestudent (talk) 06:39, 24 April 2016 (UTC)