User talk:Sadler125

Your submission at Articles for creation: Draft:Left Forum (June 22)
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Onel5969 (talk) 17:01, 22 June 2014 (UTC)
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 * Perhaps I can help you with this. What the article needs most is greater concision and more references. It really helps to insert the references in the text as outlines by REFBEGIN. When working for concision, try to remove the extensive material explaining how important it is; the article can speak for itself. You;re trying to say what you ant to say to the reader, but an encyclopedia article says what the ordinary reader wuill wantto know. There;'s a difference.  When you have revised the article sufficiently, please ask me to re-review it, which i will do as soon as possible. Ask directly on my user talk page User talk:DGG    DGG ( talk ) 15:27, 23 June 2014 (UTC)