User talk:Sakinah52/Alfred E. Johnson

I think you have made an excellent start here of organizing the information you were able to obtain. Among the things that can be done to improve the article are the identification and inclusion of more hyperlinks to existing Wikipedia articles. I have included several examples that I think will improve the articles usefulness. In addition, you should try to sustain a consistent narrative voice throughout. Note the places where I have made some adjustments to see how this helps with the overall flow of the article. Hoopes (talk) 18:48, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

The information from the biographical timeline needs to be integrated into the biographical narrative of the article. This should be done in such a way that repetition is minimized or eliminated. The references section also needs to be cleaned up in order to bring it into a standard Wikipedia format. Among the information that is missing from this article is discussion of Johnson's contributions to archaeological knowledge. You have no discussion of the topics of his research or the results of the projects that he conducted. A discussion of this will be critical for a successful article.Hoopes (talk) 19:15, 20 October 2014 (UTC)