User talk:Sakinamorrow/sandbox

Using Sandbox Talk Page to communicate about our Wiki paragraph on Lisa Nakamura
This seems rather straightforward. I hope I don't forget!
 * Also learning to indent. --Sakinamorrow (talk) 00:14, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

So will we be using the Talk Page In the Sandbox?
Does this make sense?--Sakinamorrow (talk) 00:26, 22 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes

Check out this piece on her critical receptions.

--BobbyP7 (talk) 00:29, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Robert, we should get started on our Wikipage
What is the first step?--Sakinamorrow (talk) 01:10, 28 September 2015 (UTC)

Assignment Specifications
Collaboration and Wikipedia: Collaboratively write one well cited paragraph of literature review that traces the reception of one of the texts from the first few weeks of class. Work only on wiki, communicating via talk pages. Draft your paragraph in the sandbox, and add it in only once completed.
 * I am having trouble locating reviews of this piece online. I just checked out the article/source you found but I am not really seeing much. Can you give me any tips and/or locate any more. I would think that for a one paragraph assignment, we should have between 4 and 5 sources. This assignment is a bit frustrating
 * Let's shoot to have a couple more sources each by Wednesday, and then we can knock out reading them and writing an outline by the weekend. Unfortunately, the assignment is basically due a week from tomorrow--Sakinamorrow (talk) 20:23, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

I feel you...more struggles here
I haven't found anything directly critiquing that essay. It turns out the piece I gave you critiqued Cyber Types, but the essay is not even in that book.

I will keep looking, though.

--BobbyP7 (talk) 22:30, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

WAIT...I Smell Hope!!!
https://calvinstowell.wordpress.com/2008/05/05/race-infor-cyberspace-identity-tourism-and-racial-passing-on-the-internet/

http://rahulsi.blogspot.com/2010/11/race-infor-cyberspace-identity-tourism.html

http://elliebrewster.com/minerva/transcripts/virtual-praxis-2-transcripts/cyborg-feminism/

Check paragraphs 9 and 10 of the last link.

--BobbyP7 (talk) 23:24, 4 October 2015 (UTC)

I will look at these tomorrow and add at least one or two more
--I will have an hour to work on this tomorrow morning around noon. Check in after that to see my contribution and perhaps we can begin writing the paragraph by Friday what do you think?--Sakinamorrow (talk) 23:52, 5 October 2015 (UTC)

I found one as well
http://politicsandculture.org/2010/08/10/race-in-cyberspace-beth-e-kolko-lisa-nakamura-2/ http://www.earthwidemoth.com/mt/archives/001927.html http://meredithegan.blogspot.com/2011/03/critical-response-race-infor-cyberspace.html

Now we have a totaly of 7 sources. Should we each write one paragraph based in the sources we found ? Perhaps you can pick 3 of the 4 you located and we can cover 3 each? I am thinking it might be best to each write a short paragraph on the sources we found and then collaborate on converging the two paragraphs into one. What do you think? I'll be working on this some more tomorrow. I am going to begin reading these three that I just posted. --Sakinamorrow (talk) 14:28, 8 October 2015 (UTC)

Draft one of my part in the piece
We are going to have to cut this down darmatically. The challenge is going to be getting this to be an effective, informational and concise review. Let me know what you think! Draft One: Critical Reception of Nakamura’s “Race In/For Cyberspace”

As cyberspace presents itself as a new and utopic paradigm for democratic participation that transcends the lines of racial difference, a radically different interpration re-locates racial identity (negotiation and construction), performativity and relations within conventional stereotypes. Alondra Nelson and Thuy N. Tu couch the work of Lisa Nakamura amidst the scholarship that addresses contemporary racial representation and performance in cyberspace, and resists the binary conception of race offered up in more mainstream discourse on the “high-tech transformation” of our social world through increased participation in cyberspace. According to Nelson and Tu, “Race In/For Cyberspace: Identity Toursim and Racial Passing on the Internet” critically challenges the conception that race can mirror the dichotomous logic and language of computerization, but rather that it is more complex than the binary structure of computational logic. http://politicsandculture.org/2010/08/10/race-in-cyberspace-beth-e-kolko-lisa-nakamura-2/ While Nakamura’s analysis of racialize identities holds weight in looking at cyber-discourse, performance and relations, a critical response to the text focuses on the extent to which Nakamura may have over-stated the intention of “white” people who participate in these cyberspaces to do harm. While Meredith E. goes on to appreciate the extent to which status quo power structures are very much in existence in new technology, including the internet, she attempts to draw attention to the idea that not all dominant group members (ie. caucasians) have the intention of replicating racial power in these spaces. She goes on further to explain that many white people that frequent cyberspace may very well see it as a space that transcends race. She however, holds back by questioning the value and validity of the idea of race neutrality, and agrees with Nakamura’s call for more discourse around race and racism in cyberspace. http://meredithegan.blogspot.com/2011/03/critical-response-race-infor-cyberspace.html Derek Mueller considers the complexity of racial performativity that Nakamura discusses in the piece. However, he challenges the piece by placing it within a techno-historical context; namely that the article was written at a time that corresponds to graphical webs browsers, and opens up the question of how racial construction and performance plays out a more visual-based medium. How does the evolving format of cyberspace re-configure the tools of (self) representation? web.http://www.earthwidemoth.com/mt/archives/001927.html — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sakinamorrow (talk • contribs) 14:39, 9 October 2015 (UTC)

The Edit...
Wow! We're going to have a long piece...

I'm thinking that instead of trying to write my section, I am going to cut a few pieces of yours, add few lines from my sources that are different, embed the citations, remove names from yours, and group our shared critique areas. I'll borrow yours as the outline for the whole paragraph, though. When I post, you can come back and re-edit according to your taste.

What do you think? --BobbyP7 (talk) 19:17, 10 October 2015 (UTC)

Yes. A few more tweaks and it will be perfect!
Oh, I likes it! I am going to copy-paste the whote thing and do a second edit. Not adding anything, just some awkard sentencing on my part and one thing (High tech transformation was quoted but not cited)

As cyberspace presents itself as a new and utopic paradigm for democratic participation that transcends the lines of racial difference, a radically different interpretation re-locates racial identity (negotiation and construction), performativity and relations within conventional categories. Lisa Nakamura's "Race In/For Cyberspace : Identity Tourism and Racial Passing on the Internet," has served as a seminal work on the politics of racial identity in digital communities, garnering nearly 300 Google Scholar citations. Alondra Nelson and Thuy N. Tu, among others, couch the work of Lisa Nakamura amidst the scholarship that addresses contemporary racial representation and performance in cyberspace and resists the binary conception of race in more mainstream discourse on the “high-tech transformation” of our social world through increased participation in cyberspace. According to Nelson and Tu, Nakamura's work critically challenges the conception that race can mirror the dichotomous logic and language of computerization, asserting that it is more complex than the binary structure of computational logic. While Nakamura’s analysis of racialized identities holds weight in cyber-discourse analysis around racial performativity, construction and negotiation, a critical response to the text focuses on the extent to which Nakamura may have over-stated the intention of “white” people who participate in these cyberspaces to exploit race and power. Some appreciate the extent to which Nakamura details how the status quo power structures are very much in existence in new technology, including the internet, and they attempt to draw attention to the idea that not all dominant group members (ie. caucasians) have the intention of replicating racial power in these spaces. Such critiques further contend that many white people who frequent cyberspace may very well see it as a space that transcends race and opens up exploration into a variety of identities. Nevertheless, the larger analysis of "Race In/For Cyberspace" resists and critiques the conception of race neutrality on the net and shares Nakamura’s call for more discourse around race and racism in cyberspace (See citations 2-5). Affirmations ring for the complex nature of (cyber) race relations and identities that Nakamura discusses in the piece; however, more current readers challenge the piece by placing it within a techno-historical context. Noting that the essay was written at a time that corresponds to limited graphical web browsers (See citations 8&9), such readers question how racial construction and performance play out in a more visual-based medium. How does the evolving format of cyberspace re-configure the tools of (self) representation?