User talk:SamiAissi/Mountain gazelle

First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? This article clearly gets across the main points of the articles to the reader which are that the gazelle combats heat stress in the summer by adapting body thermal gradients and reducing sweat production.

What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? This article does seem a bit wordy and uses a language that can be simplified to make it more readable to the general audience without losing any information.

What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? Simplify the language in the article and remove any information that isn’t necessary.

Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? If so, what? Including why this is important to the overall function of the animal and how this affects them.

Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? Specifically, does the information they are adding to the article make sense where they are putting it? I believe where they plan to add the section is very fitting for the information maybe adding subsections would be helpful in the event that other information about survival were added.

Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? No I think they do a good job of blending the two articles together to provide information about heat stress as a whole.

Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? No the author does a good job of being objective when presenting the information

Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y.” I would suggest the author omit the word ‘remarkable’

Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? The article relies of credible sources

Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, it may lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single point of view. No the article does a good job of balancing the information from both sources.

Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately! No The author does a good job of accurately representing the information in the articles. Rmarin8 (talk) 01:12, 11 October 2021 (UTC)Rachel Marin

Hello! I just reviewed your draft. Make sure to check for grammatical and spelling errors, and format the draft with the headings for the article body. Place the citations next to their respective sentences, or else the Wikipedia staff might try to flag you for plagiarism. The links work perfectly. Go into a little more detail about your topic. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cgabri4 (talk • contribs) 04:03, 11 October 2021 (UTC)