User talk:Samifeller/sandbox

Wikipedia is useful and insightful

Peer Review by Cecilia
I really like how you started your lead. It looks and sounds like a well-reviewed Wikipedia article and I like what you have planned to add as well. But there are some minor details you might want to go over before publishing it, for example


 * She was born in 1943 and then got a role on Laverne and Shirley the same year? That seems unlikely
 * "…paved way for Marshall's career" might sound too opinionated. Do you have any proof that this is what led her to pursue a career in media?
 * I'm sure you were planning on it, but don't forget to add citations and to add them in the right format
 * Add links to the appropriate words

One last question: Why are you creating a whole new lead for Penny Marshall? She has a lead on her page and I think you can simply add on things you have found out or believe are missing from the lead. Other than that, try to focus on what is missing, rather than creating whole new paragraphs. Much less work for you too! Cbschramm (talk) 21:43, 29 March 2018 (UTC)

Professor Schreiber feedback
This is good work, Sami. I agree with Cecilia that you need to be a bit more detail-oriented with phrasing, grammar and spelling. Please be sure to give it a thorough review and don't forgot to cite all of your sources. Cecilia also has a good point that you should add information where it is missing/lacking rather than trying to add an entirely new section to replace one that is currently in place. MJSProf (talk) 18:17, 15 April 2018 (UTC)