User talk:Samlinder/sandbox

Peer Edit Article Contribution: Gitika Maheshwari I liked how many examples you have given to display the racism that occurs within the football association. For some of the cases that are provided, and maybe expand on the example and talk about the response from the players. Additionally, the organization by the league could be helpful to the flow of your passage. Additionally, as Tena mentioned below, placing it in chronological order is essential especially when it comes to sports and the context of the event that occurred. Furthermore, just constantly check that your tone or what you write. Overall, I think that you give a clear depiction of what players/teams have to face and the difficulties they must overcome even when they have a big platform racism still exists. Gitikamaheshwari (talk) 23:17, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Edit Article Contribution: Tena-Lesly Reid

I believe the article is very informative in displaying acts of racism in association soccer. However, I do suggest that these events go into chronological order because as of now it seems like you jumping to different periods. Also there are some incidents where your sentencing is kind of awkward such as, "The police officer being chanted at threw teargas into the stands and shot his gun, killing one and injuring another." I would suggest altering that sentence to "The police officer who was chanted at threw..." Also I think it would help if every instance your referring to in the sandox could use some more cohesion. It seems like you sort of make each racist incident into separate occasions. I would suggest using some transitional sentences, so they seem more connected. Also I would suggest including a concluding sentence that would tie together what commonalities these situations have with each other. Overall, it was a good approach in portraying what racism that exists between soccer teams.

Peer Edit Article Contribution: Anjali Sankar This is a great topic, and very well written and informative. One thing I would do to enhance the article is to make your contribution more cohesive; make sure the sentences and paragraphs are connected along with relevant transition sentences in order to help the reader understand the work a little better and make it easier to follow. Make sure to expand on some topics; don't just touch on the what but add on by briefly describing why/how.Also, try avoiding repetitive statements/words, try applying sentence variation throughout the piece. Other than that, it's very well separated in terms of paragraph structure and organization, just make sure to describe each paragraph with more detail and expand on the topic to give the reader a better understanding of each instance/topic relating to each soccer game/scenario. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Anjalisankar (talk • contribs) 03:31, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Racism in Association Football

'''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? '''

The article stays relevant to the topic for the entire article, only touching on neutral facts that have to do with Racism in Association football across the world.

'''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?'''

many of the quotations on this page are from the early 2000s (2001-2006) and could be updated due to changing times

What else could be improved?

Although the highest levels of football are played in Europe, it does not mean that Europe should get a larger section. Evening out the sections could make the article better.

'''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?'''

There are few claims that are biased. The ones that could be considered biased are quoted from other sources

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

The European viewpoint is overrepresented which shows in the fact that Europes section is twice as long as all others.

'''Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?'''

The links in the citations are active and all address the topic being stated in the article

'''Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?'''

many of the cited articles come from news sources who are typically biased. A large majority of citations come from the BBC who do a lot of coverage across Europe and tend to have more liberal leaning views of race. The wikipedia article states the facts whereas the BBC articles tend to go in depth more and express opinions What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

Since the topic is race related there are a lot of false claims and opinions in the talk page with one section being titled "lack of neutrality and minimal content quality is appalling." However there is little bias on the page itself so although behind the scenes there is discourse, there is still a good product out on wikipedia.

'''How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?'''

The article is rated C-Class and High Importance due to the fact that the World Cup was this summer and also because race is a very hot topic at the moment. Wikipedia is a little bit less PC and there are many people bickering as opposed to a healthy discussion.

-Samlinder (talk) 17:37, 11 September 2018 (UTC)

Feedback
Sam, this is the Talk page which is where behind the scenes stuff goes (like my feedback to you). This sort of work, like the Article Evaluation, should go in the Sandbox itself. Good work on the evaluation. - Kquave (talk) 19:45, 11 September 2018 (UTC)