User talk:Samone H/sandbox

Hi, I looked forward to future assignments.

Peer Review for Samone H
I like how you broke up the section into more clear and organized paragraphs from the previous text. Maybe you could add in some numbers of how much the population did decline after the first phase was enforced. It'd be interesting to see how successful it was from supported data. Also the same with the unsuccessful phase two, with supporting the text with numbers of the decline in population in those years. What were the policies set in place for phase two? Maybe just add more details to that as well. Overall, it has a good lead from the previous text and the coverage could be covered a little more. The article did stay neutral through out the section, and your sources seem reliable. I also need to add more detail to my article as well!Victoriali2 (talk) 03:51, 2 April 2018 (UTC)

Second Peer Review for Samone H
Nice changes overall! I love how you added more statistics to the first phase and how much the population declined, and also for the second phase. I think it really adds much more ethics to the article and proves to the reader that the population did infect decrease a significant factor. I also liked how you added family planning as a topic because it shows the history of how Singapore was introduced to it from Constance Goh. Your article has significantly improved since I last read it! Great changes! Victoriali2 (talk) 03:04, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Response to Victoria
Hi,

Thank you for your feedback! You had a really good idea about adding in statistical information about phase one and the unsuccessful phase two, and I don't know why but that just never crossed my mind. I also believe I am going to add more information about Singapore using migration becoming another solution. I changed most of the lead and I'm glad to know you like it.

Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Samone H (talk • contribs) 22:18, 4 April 2018 (UTC)