User talk:Sandeepbrar/sandbox

Peer Review by Clara-a97

Hi Sandeepbrar, the topic you are contributing to is extremely interesting. I really like how detailed your contribution is, all the examples you provided and the relevant use of references. I have made some very small changes in the grammar.

If I may, here are some remarks and advices.

I would suggest you add titles to your sections in order to make the article more clear to understand. I have noticed that the original article you are contributing to already does not have sub-categories, adding them could be useful. Having a box for “contents” could also further increase the clarity of the article. I would also suggest adding some details or some reference links to notions such as “TURA” or “Citizen’s Action” (in particular that one), since it might be hard to see what you refer to otherwise. I also found that statements such as “Latin America and Asia have industrialized at tremendous rates over the past decades. In doing so, governments focused on output to develop the economy while not paying attention to the environment”, unless enriched with some more informations or references might seem to vague or biased to certain audiences. This might only be my personal feeling though.

Clara-a97 (talk) 02:19, 23 November 2017 (UTC)