User talk:Sanglee9804/sandbox

TA Comments:

In-text citations: None. Some urls are pasted at the end of some bullet points, but this is not an acceptable way to do in-text citations.

Professional tone: The scientist is referred to only as “he” throughout the section which can be confusing. Refer to scientists by their last name after the first reference.

Paraphrasing real science: no, this section is simply listing the awards won by Lubitz.

Grammar and spelling: Overall good. Some minor errors. For instance, “In 2002, he received Zavoisky Award…” should read “In 2002, he received the Zavoisky Award…”.

Links to other wiki articles: none

Score: 8/20

Peer Review:

You should try to make Awards a heading. Format it as a heading through "Edit" and Wikipedia should automatically format it as such for you. Some of the awards are just the names of the awards themselves rather than sentences. Try to be consistent with your syntax, i.e., make all of them into sentences or make all of them into award names. If you can, try to have dates for all of the awards and, if not, put them in as chronological of an order as you can. Furthermore, you end them with links to where the award/organization is. Wikipedia pages do not contain raw links like this; use the built-in citation feature instead, such that they may be listed on the bottom of the page. Fajayanru (talk) 18:32, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

LLARENA-FAJAYAN, JEAN Peer Review Score: 20/20