User talk:Sanjana Inala/sandbox

Hi! You evaluation of dogwood suggests that you could find some things. I don't see any evaluation of other topics. You need to explore a few and make sure that you can find ten references to contribute something substantial to the topic. Lethornton (talk) 22:15, 1 March 2018 (UTC)

It is great that you organized your sandbox so nicely to show your work. Your outline seems well organized as well, but I cannot quite figure out how you are using ten sources. Remember that you cannot quote directly and you need to evaluate ten sources that contribute scientific perspective on the topic. It is OK to have links to other wikipedia articles or sources that are not primary literature, but they do not count as your ten. Keep working on expending what you will contribute and think about how you will work your efforts into what is already on the current version of the article. Lethornton (talk) 00:55, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hey Sanjana,

I found a few small grammar correction that you could make:

Introduction to the Page

1. "Prunus is a genus of trees and shrubs, which includes the plums, cherries, peaches, nectarines, apricots and almonds." There should have a comma right before almonds.

2. "Prunus fruit are defined as drupe or stone fruit because the fleshy mesocarp surrounding the endocarp (pit or stone) is the edible part." This sentence is a run-on sentence I think? Maybe a correction could be: Prunus fruit are defined as drupes, or stone fruits, because of the fleshy mesocarp surrounding the endocarp (pit or stone). This fleshy mesocarp is the edible part of the fruit."

3. "Most Prunus fruit and seeds are commonly used for processing, such as jam production, canning, drying or roasting." I think it should be 'in processing' instead of for processing?

Bioactive Compounds

1. In the first sentence of this section you wrote the word genus twice when mentioning Prunus. In the next sentence I don't think you need to say Prunus genus again. I think Prunus is just fine.

2. There should also be a comma before 'as well as' in your second sentence.

3. The last sentence in you section about cherries a run on. Maybe you can change it something like this? Some of these natural antioxidants include ascorbic acid, tocopherol, and epigallocatechin gallate; they can be found in certain cherry extracts.

4. Remember to italicized all scientific names

5. The first sentence of your almonds section is also a run off. Maybe you can try to break it up into 2 sentences?

7. In the section on apricots, you are missing a comma after 'Vitamin A' in the last sentence.

8. In your last section on peaches and nectarines, there should be an 'and' before cartilage and wound healing.

Overall, I think your tone is good, there doesn't seem to be any bias and seems very objective on the subject matter. I also like how you broke up each section into multiple parts because it is easier to read that way. I think the main comments I have for your draft are grammar comments that I have made above and perhaps you can expand more on ideas or link the different concepts that you mention in the Bioactive Compounds section? For example, the term 'free radicals' isn't clearly defined, reactive oxygen species, different enzymes, etc. Also, I don't know if this really matters but you mention that recent studies have been conducted on the antioxidant properties of cherries, but you only reference one source. If possible, I think it would be good to add more references to this area to support your claim (in case someone one wants to read up on multiple studies). Once again, overall good job! I thought that your topic was interesting and I learned a little more about the Prunus genus! Nicolepotter728 (talk) 04:25, 26 March 2018 (UTC)

Hi! You are making good progress. It seems appropriate that you switched to the Prunus genus, and I think I see how your work will fit into the current page. There is already a section on "toxicity" on the current page. Are you planning to put your Bioactive compounds after that? You also could consider being clear about toxic compounds within your section. Or you could be more clear that your section is on beneficial compounds from each species. Your peer editor has some good suggestions. Think about big structural changes before you work on the detailed grammar and spelling details. As you are working on your final revisions, consider how you can find more scientific support for your descriptions. It seems that there should be more literature out there for the benefits of these important fruit species. Lethornton (talk) 21:29, 11 April 2018 (UTC)