User talk:Sanlup1998

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Additions to Sexuality in music videos
Hi ,

thank you very much for your contributions.

Unfortunately, your addition to Sexuality in music videos seems to contain personal interpretation (or original research / original synthesis, as we often say), and it seems to be written in a non-encyclopedic, colloquial writing style. Over-generalization like...


 * "Majority of the music videos by women was related to depression, and once younger women viewers realize it, it’ll lead to one’s appearance, anxiety and a depression state."
 * "Majority of the viewers who do end up watching videos with some sexual content, go through withdrawals with their body image because their body isn’t as good or isn’t nice like the women’s body in the video."

...is probably not yet suitable for a Wikipedia article in this form.

Your edit has been archived to the revision history of the article for now; see Special:Diff/929260801 for your addition and Special:Diff/929438839 for my removal.

If you disagree about this decision, feel free to open the article's talk page, Talk:Sexuality in music videos, and click "new section". You can then refer to my message and explain that you would like to hear a third opinion about this topic.

If you agree with this decision, you may like to copy your addition from Special:Diff/929260801 to your sandbox (User:Sanlup1998/sandbox). There, you can easily refine the sentences. When you have done so, you can open the article's talk page (see above), create a new section there and explain the situation. You can then point to your sandbox and request the changes to be added to the article after discussion.

Thank you very much in advance.

Good luck and best regards, ~ ToBeFree (talk) 21:15, 5 December 2019 (UTC)