User talk:SantanaG123/Academia Mayor de la Lengua Quechua

Hi Santana, is there a reason you only translated the first section? Of course, there are no strict length requirements, and I encouraged you to choose what to translate based on the quality of the information, but the rest of the sections in Spanish seem to also have pretty good citations, and they thus seem worth translating as well. That doesn't strike me as an unreasonable amount, and translating all (or at least most) of this article seems on par with what other students are doing. I'd recommend that you add some additional content ASAP so that you can possibly get feedback on it during this round of peer review, which will help you improve its content. Bradhoot (talk) 18:23, 14 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments on second draft
Good work on your draft article! Here are some comments to help you revise as you prepare to publish your work by integrating it with the existing English article. As I mentioned in my last round of feedback, it seems like there are a lot more citations in the Spanish article, and a lot more content you could draw from there, whereas some of what you’ve translated doesn’t have good sourcing. Remember that one requirement is that you add at least five good sources to the English article, so one thing to concentrate on in your final revisions is making sure you have solid citations. In addition to these changes and the ones I made directly, in our workshop, you should be prepared to think about how you’re going to incorporate your work into the existing article. Where is each piece going to go? How will you integrate things so that you’re not duplicating existing material? Where will you replace existing material with your new material? How might you need to alter your translation to fit in the existing context, including some possible re-writing?
 * You definitely want to add links wherever possible. For instance, Quechua, Cusco, Inti Raymi, many place names, many people’s names, all those fancy words at the end (phytonyms, etc.), and many other things should be links.
 * I don’t understand what this means: “In their practice their jobs are oriented in relation to Qheswa or Cusquenian Quechua.”
 * I’m not sure what the right demonym for “person from Cusco” is, but Cusquenian strikes me as not it. I think you could possibly use the Spanish here, but in italics, or you might consider just circumlocution, saying “of Cusco” or “from Cusco” in most cases instead.
 * Should “where interpreted the papers of the Inca” be “where he played the role of the Inca”? But also, what does that mean, exactly? Another article says he was the director of the reconstructed Inti Raymi festival, but was he an actor, too? Also, is this relevant? I’d suggest maybe just taking this clause out.
 * Why did the Academy have “statues”. Do you mean “statutes”? But also, is that the right word, or should it be something like by-laws or articles of incorporation?
 * Background, first paragraph: I think the last sentence needs a citation.
 * In the background section, the dates should be formatted as in English, the other way around.
 * “officialized” – what does this mean? Declared it an official language? Of what?
 * What does this mean: “prescribed the written five vowels”?
 * The sentence starting with “According to linguist…” needs a citation, definitely. Also, you haven’t used the abbreviation AMLQ before, so if you’re going to use it here, you need to introduce it in parentheses after the first use of the term, and explain that the abbreviation is because of the Spanish name. Same foes for HAQL a bit later.
 * I don’t understand what this means: “On the other hand, the commission to establish the statutes was not created until 2009, although it had been recognized as a decentralized organization in 2007.”
 * In the sentence starting “The mission…”, do they use the word “purity”? I don’t like that as a description of a language, but if they use it and that’s an accurate description of their goals, it should stay, but I’d like to see a citation to their mission statement or something. Also in this sentence, what is it that happens with the linguistic study at the end? They want to encourage it? Presumably study of Quechua?
 * I don’t think “follows utilizing” is idiomatic.
 * The sentence beginning with “David Samanez Florez” definitely needs citations.
 * This bit is very hard to follow: “mediating the Organic Law of Regional Governments Number 27867 and its modification of Law Number 27903 and the Internal Regulation of Organizations and Functions of the Regional Council of Cusco”
 * In the second Regional Decrees paragraph, I don’t think we use the word “zones” in this way in English
 * Also in this section, and all the previous mentions of laws, these laws are presumably available somewhere online and/or were written about in newspapers, so you could potentially cite those sources for them. Right now, there are no sources in this section.
 * The section on Quechua World Congresses also needs citations.
 * In the reference sections, other Wikipedia articles don’t make good references. These citations should be deleted, and whatever was referring to them should instead cite the original source cited in those articles. In other words, go to those articles, find the original source of the information, and cite it here too.

Bradhoot (talk) 23:21, 5 November 2021 (UTC)