User talk:Sarah.eunji/sandbox

Since you have a decent amount of historical information, I would definitely suggest making a "History" header and putting all information under that instead of in the abstract. I look forward to reading a little bit more about the current research. Your page is in very good shape so far. Good job! Bkp31079 (talk) 00:02, 13 November 2015 (UTC)Bianca

Sweiner02 (talk) 01:50, 13 November 2015 (UTC)
 * Great abstract. Very clear, covers a broad view of the topic.
 * Do some careful copy editing.
 * You have a lot of detail! This is looking really good for the current stage of the game.
 * I'm not sure the "warning signs" subsection adds anything. Those aren't really warning signs and I think you'd be better off leaving it out.
 * You've done a good job of making a difficult mechanism fairly accessible.
 * Think about your subheadings and where they are helpful. There are some that seem unnecessary.
 * There's not much on this in the past 10 years, but there is some research out there. Make sure you find what you can and include it.